User:Briannastjean/Theory of Hyper(in)visibility/Yingtao Hanbao Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Briannastjean, MeaganLukavec, Martiniaudrey, Gabspedraza, Lizzo2210, RamirezAlejandro305


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Briannastjean/Theory_of_Hyper%28in%29visibility?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article lacks a lead, and I think the authors can accomplish this quickly by giving a brief description of the Theory of Hyper(in)visibility. The rest of this article uses a lot of examples to show what hyper(in)visibility is, and while I think that is useful, I do think that the examples should be placed in their own section or category, and the theory itself should be explain more in its own terms. I think specifically explaining the terms "visible," "invisible," "hypervisible," and "hyper(in)visible" could be a good addition to the body of the article, so that the concepts in this theory can be better understood by the audience.

I think there may have been a mishap pertaining to the references at the bottom that could be easily fixed. one of the sources is listed three times, one of the times in the wrong format. I recognize some of the sources used in the article, as I have been working on the theory presentation for the Theory of Hyper(in)visibility, and they all seem to be accurate and reliable. Overall, I think the main things would be to organize and structure the information and work on introducing the topic in the lead.