User:Brianne202/Well-being/AlexGorton Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brianne Ginter, @Brianne202


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Brianne202/Well-being?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Well-being

Peer Review
The purpose of this article was to inform readers on well-being. The original article was already very good but definitely lacked some things and I think your revisions really improved this article. The lead section is very easy to understand and gives a great idea of what the entirety of the article will cover. Even after your edits and additions, you allowed the article to keep a simple and clear structure. This was very helpful while giving feedback because it allowed me to check out your additions by just one click. One problem that I did notice was that some of the coverage wasn’t entirely balanced. There would be a lot of points about a certain topic or subtopic, but not a lot about another. For example, you added two pieces of information that fell under the quite lengthy category of models and components. I also found difficulty in this while editing my own article; most sources really valued information about topics that have already been covered quite well. Nevertheless, your information in these sections was very good and added clarification to areas that seemed a little fuzzy. For next time, I would definitely look into finding information about the less covered parts of your article. This will help balance out the article so all parts and pieces of your desired topic can be covered in detail. The majority of your content was neutral and there seemed to be no obvious signs of objective wording. I did notice in your addition of relationship building, there were some sentences that some people may view as opinionated. For example, one of your statements in that section read: “When meeting new people, happy individuals are more likely to have meaningful interactions than individuals who aren’t very happy.” I agree with this statement personally but there may be some factors that would cause someone to disagree with this. It’s difficult to say something like this without making it sound subjective. For something like this, I would recommend finding a source that conducted studies that prove this statement to be true. Overall, you did a great job in keeping a neutral tone and sticking to the goal of informing the reader. After checking your sources, I saw a lot of world organizations or school studies which is a great sign. All of these sources seem to be very reliable and provide valid information. In conclusion, I feel you did a very good job on your article. For next time, I would definitely try to balance out the coverage of information as well as word choice. As of now, great job.