User:Brimal99/Gate control theory/Deswilliams22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brimal99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Gate control theory


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gate control theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
I cannot see any revisions you made in your sandbox but here are some of my suggestions on how this article can be improved!

I think one topic you could add could be about pain and how it ties into Gate Control Theory. Pain is talked about heavily but it's not really defined. Making a section about this could also give you an opportunity to expound on how pain is not something that can be measured and can be as bad or as good as the person who is experiencing it is making it out to be. I think that brainstorming here could bring the reader some clarity to why Gate Control Theory is relevant when it comes to its relationship with pain.

Another thing that stuck out to me is that this article has a lot of "expensive language" in it. It's hard to get a good understanding because I'm having to look up what a lot of the words mean. Due to the complexity of the topic I know this can't be fixed completely, but I'd skim through the article and see if there's some place where you could simplify the language without taking away from the overall meaning.

For Example:

"The gate control theory of pain describes how non-painful sensations can override and reduce painful sensations. A painful, nociceptive stimulus stimulates primary afferent fibers and travels to the brain via transmission cells." Can be revised to be:

"The gate control theory of pain describes how non-painful sensations can override and reduce painful ones. Nociceptive, or painful, stimuli prompt the primary afferent fibers to travel to the brain via transmission cells."

Hope this helps!