User:BrittanyAngelMa/Yuri Yokomizo/Lianawongg Peer Review

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BrittanyAngelMa


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 * User:Yuri Yokomizo


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Hello, this is Liana:) Thank you for this article, I found it interesting to read through the article as I have always been a fan of Sumikko Gurashi, yet I have not enough knowledge about the artist. I think it is a great article to have on Wikipedia, as a lot of the times the series or characters that artists have created would gain a lot of popularity while the artist would not be as visible, it is a great way to introduce the artist to the public through this Wikipedia page you have created!

Generally, your writing is really easy to understand, as you have divided the article into parts that are clear for readers to read through it. The references that you have are great sources that provided you with a lot of information that you need. You have also introduced the background story of the characters, while also presenting the Japanese popular cultures, the kawaii culture as well as some other popular characters under the culture, which I think is a very good point to add, not only allow readers to have a basic sense of the culture but also getting to understand more about how do characters are being created.

Here are some of my thoughts and suggestions, but feel free to disregard them:

-The article has provided a clear basic introduction to the artist and her practices through the introductory sentence in the lead section. Contents are relevant to the topic, mostly about the most famous series that the artist has created with the current and contemporary list of references, written in a neutral tone with own wordings.

-Maybe could have added some more background on the artists' early life or career as there is more about the Sumikko Gurashi series that she created than the actual biography on the artist herself, including a few sentences about her childhood or before her university life.

-How she has developed her interest or her works, any inspirations that led her into the various characters of the Sumikko Gurashi series that is depicting the "minor" or "insignificant" little things in life?

-Maybe you could also add the little story of each character that you have listed, as I think they each have their own background and narrative, or maybe you are planning to do that already.

(as there are food, animals, dust, mountains, etc. in the series which are each telling their own unique and specific story based on what they are.)

-Maybe could include some other practices or works that the artists have done other than the Sumikko Gurashi series. As there is an existing article of Sumikko Gurashi already, the article has in-depth details on the page, containing the background of the artist, the history of the series, products and films. I am worried that the two articles would appear to be a little bit similar when it comes to the content about the series as the existing article has covered quite a lot of information that you have already.

-Would it be better to combine the two articles together, or if the background of the artist could be part of the existing article? Is it possible if you could add more information on the artist's childhood, early life, academic etc?

-What are Yokomizo's early practices? What kinds of works has she created before the Sumikko Gurashi series, and how does it shift and led her into the series? How does her life has inspired her into creating the series?

I am looking forward to seeing how this article would unfold, thank you for allowing me to have a better sense of the artist!