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ORIGINAL:: Capital punishment is currently authorized in 31 states, by the federal government and the U.S. military. In recent years, New Mexico (2009), Illinois (2011), Connecticut (2012) and Maryland (2013) have legislatively abolished the death penalty, replacing it with a sentence of life imprisonment with no possibility for parole. The Nebraska Legislature also abolished capital punishment in 2015, but it was reinstated by a statewide vote in 2016. Additionally, courts in Delaware recently ruled that the state’s capital punishment law is unconstitutional. States across the country will continue to debate its fairness, reliability and cost of implementation.

PARAPHRASE:: The government and military authorizes capital punishment in 31 different states. Capital punishment has been completely been taken away ['''take away is not as good as the original word. It's ambiguous and informal. Can you find another word to replace it?'''] from some states and in replace of the death penalty the convected felon will serve a life sentence with no parole and so many different states are still working on getting rid of the death penalty because it is not humane at all.

Wenqi's Feedback
Please see my comment in the above bracket. Also, your sentence is too long. Please break it into two sentences.

Alyssa's Feedback
Your paraphrase is overall good because you took the main points of the source and implemented them into your writing in your own way. One concern with the paraphrase is the end of the last sentence where you said "because it is not humane at all". The way it is worded makes it sound a bit biased, so you may want to consider changing it to something like "because they believe it is inhumane" so you emphasize that it is the states belief and not your own belief. The tone is appropriate because it is neutral and matter of fact, which is important for Wiki articles. The text is clear and free of errors except for one small typo (convected instead of convicted). Another suggestion is to make the last sentence into two separate sentences because it is a bit lengthy (maybe consider ending the sentence after "parole" and start the next on with "So many"). The source seems reliable and the information is relevant.

Alyssa M's Feedback
I think your paraphrase sounds good. The key points you made went well with the original. I think the information you gave would be something great to add to the contemporary era part of the article or modern day public opinion. The only grammar/spelling mistakes I saw were the two "been"s in the second sentence and "convected" instead of "convicted". I also agree that the last sentence is a bit of a run on and could be split into two smaller sentences.