User:Brontesmithclass/Climate change and fisheries/Gschultz1980 Peer Review

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I would consider changing the order of this to "climate change effects on fisheries" Fisheries and climate change effect" as I think it is clearer as fisheries are the subject being impacted.

In this sentence "Human activity has been linked to lake nutrition levels, which high levels are correlated to increasing vulnerability to climate change." I think some work on the flow is needed. Maybe that is a different word order or simply changing which to and or where.

In this sentence I would recommend saying " Petroleum is formed by the combination of large aquatic matter deposits paired with hundreds of millions of years of heat and pressure, natural gas deposits such as natural gas are formed which can then be made into petroleum, " as opposed to "Petroleum is formed by large deposits of aquatic matter, then over the course of hundreds of millions of years with heat and pressure deposits of natural gas such are formed which can be made into petroleum"

Overall: I think what you have added is really good. It was helpful and definitely made the article better. I think the above are all the formal edits and suggestions I have for your edits!

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