User:Brontesmithclass/Climate change and fisheries/Siroisj2499 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brontesmith


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Brontesmithclass/Climate_change_and_fisheries?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Climate change and fisheries

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is clear and concise. It's marked that it needs some citations, but I'm sure that will be included before publishing.

Article Body

The opening sentence regarding coral reefs is a bit confusing. Does "with no change" reference no change in climate actions? The context of that wording doesn't make complete sense to me, I would expand on that more. The second paragraph could be expanded on as well. It's interesting topics and I want to know more about it.

It seems like a lot of the article has been trimmed down to get rid of some useless wording, that's great to see! I think everything needs to be tied together and expanded upon more though. Also, there's a lot of citations that need to be added. Maybe organizing things into the subsets they correspond with would be a good start too. It's all very interesting material but I'd like to see more of it.