User:Brooklynfedie/Epidemiology of diabetes/Schmidtj5997 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brooklynfedie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Brooklynfedie/Epidemiology_of_diabetes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Epidemiology of diabetes

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I really enjoy the article you chose about the epidemiology of diabetes. The original article seems to lack a lot of content regarding the subject of diabetes and just information overall. Your lead for the updated article is quite detailed and provides great content for the existing lead in the article. I additionally find it helpful that you were able utilize and add a numerous amount of new sources that can help build this article up and offer even more content for future readers. Overall the article seems well put together in the areas where content was added. Although, the article does seem unfinished in your sandbox. It seems that you have only added to the lead of the article and haven't contributed to other places. This is totally fine if that is what you were wanting to add, but I wasn't sure. If you were to add more, I was suggest trying to utilize more of your existing references you have already used if that can be done. The amount of content you have added it wonderful, but I worry that it may be to general. Meaning that it seems to generally be about diabetes as a disease and not much on the epidemiology of it. But the content you have added gives a nice preface to what is to come in the rest of the article and gives readers a good background on what diabetes is and general information on the disease. Your additions seem to fit well with the other content within the original article itself, so nice work. My greatest advice would be to see if you could add more on the epidemiology of the disease if possible and add more to more of the bnody sections if you can find any relevant information.