User:Brtneynguyen/Security Alarm/Naturalbrigade Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brtneynguyen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Brtneynguyen/Security Alarm - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
your article stays on point and is unbiased, which is great. you stay on the objective and give details on your topic very clearly. The issues i found were the lack of a intro. I couldn't find the a wiki with that name so i am assuming you are making your own. to start you are missing some kind of intro into your topic. maybe you could start briefly start on the history of security alarms or something else that would help create an intro. The other thing you are missing is the citations, did you use the cite button when writing your draft? because when i opened it up there are literally no links for citations or a references page (which wiki should make for you automatically). Ignore this if you can see the citations. the actual content you wrote is very good though and is well paced.