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Copied to live article Desmond Fennell

Edit Summary: I changed the organization of this article slightly. Certain headings had NPOV or no encyclopedic tone in their labels, such as “confronting consumerist liberalism,” and separated content that was extremely similar to each other. As a solution, I made most headings subheadings, and turned their similarities into the main headings.

I also marked quite a few areas in which citations were needed, however most information does seem to be Original Research. Certain claims appear to violate NPOV and NOR, unless there is an appropriate citation that can be listed to back up these claims.

The rest of my edits addressed NPOV. With a majority of instances, I made sure any claims were clearly marked as claims. Additionally, I cut out any information that did not contribute to any facts and violated NPOV. The rest of my edits were largely grammar-oriented.