User:BrycenWheeler/Dasymutilla occidentalis/Amelia Twibell Peer Review

General info
Bmaelynw, Kelseywigger, Cw25018, BrycenWheeler
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dasymutilla occidentalis
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BrycenWheeler/Dasymutilla_occidentalis?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The economic importance section of this article sandbox draft is really strong and full of substantial content. The lead in this draft still needs some additional information. Perhaps the authors could include a couple of short introductory sentences that introduce each section of the article without going into any great detail. The sections in this draft are easy to read, specifically the section on Ecology. The writing in this section clearly illustrates the eating habits and ecological role in the food web. The geographic range and habitat preferences sections of this draft could use some additional information. Perhaps the author could specify what states in North America this species is found. Also, they might include the type of environment this organism prefers and where it thrives verses where it does not. Something the author might consider in their final article is adding an image of this organism. Images do capture reader's attention and help them visualize what the author has so effortlessly illustrated with their words. Additionally, oftentimes an image solidifies new information even more within the minds of readers. Overall, although this sandbox article draft has areas of improvement it is truly off to a great start!