User:Brynnmarie28/Homeless women in the United States/Genderx Peer Review

General info

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Brynnmarie28


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 * Homeless women in the United States - Wikipedia

Lead
I think that the lead is good. You don’t really need to add anything in my opinion, but I have one note about the last sentence: “Additionally, the poor mental and hygienic health of women is both a precursor and consequence of homelessness among the female population.” I would recommend changing it to, “Additionally, poor mental and hygienic health of women is both a precursor and consequence of homelessness among the female population”, taking out “the” because it makes it sound as though women as a whole have poor mental and hygienic health.

Content
I like the change of the heading “Women and Poverty” to “Feminization of Poverty”. It does a really great job of capturing the phenomenon without requiring too much explanation because you’ve linked the page “Feminization of Poverty” to it. I don’t think that you need the sentence, “This initial research is credited to Van Vliet in 1988 who found that women, with or without children, are more at risk for experiencing poverty.”

I think that it was a good call removing the section on veterans. It shouldn’t have the original research that it did, and should be redone if it were to be included at all.

I don’t understand why you deleted, “ Homeless women are more likely to have experienced childhood sexual abuse and/or foster care and adult partner abuse than the average female population. Was it just not really relevant here?

I appreciated your addition of domestic violence during the pandemic, as it keeps the article relevant to where we are today. Do you have some stats that you can add to show by how much it increased in the States?

I would love to see more about Trauma-Informed Care because it seems so important – great addition to the article!!

I REALLY love the section on Stigmatization of the Welfare Recipient. I would like to see more about what stigmatization of the welfare recipient looks like. Currently you have info about when stigmatization became a politicized thing, and how that relates to the feminization of poverty and then some stats. If you personalize the data and give some examples of the various ways that they are and have been stigmatized that will really round out this section.

Tone and Balance
I like the way that you write and the inclusions that you have made in the article. I would like to see more representation of different perspectives in the section "stigmatization of the welfare recipient". This is a great section in which to introduce to people who might otherwise never know of it, the broken down and analyzed forms of stigmatization that welfare recipients are subjected to.

Sources and References
https://www.usich.gov/resources/uploads/asset_library/CLEARED-DJM-102-USICH-Report-on-Trauma-Informed-Care.pdf

-         You can use the tools on Wikipedia to generate a proper reference for this webpage. Used in trauma informed care section.

Organization
Organization looks great! I like where you've included everything.

Images and Media
I don't see that you've included any images and don't see where you would need to.

Overall Impressions
Great job! I hope that my suggestions are helpful. Again, I want most for you to include more about stigmatization because so many don't even stop to think about it or how to work against it in themselves and others. I really enjoyed reading your additions Brynn:) Have a great Summer!!