User:Bryweb75/Police brutality/Asofrankcsueb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bryweb75


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * n/a


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Police brutality

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This is a very long article, as noted in the alert at the top. First, I would consider focusing on one section of the article, such as the second on the United States specifically. Also noted is that there are sentence structure and grammatical issues. For example, in the section about Breonna Taylor, I see a need for additional clarifications i.e. the date of her death is not noted, only the date (no year) of Officer Hankison's indictment. I also see grammatical and capitalization issues that could be corrected and sentences that could be written in a more clear manner.