User:Bubbles the fish/Scott Islands Marine National Wildlife Area /Echill88 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Scott Islands Marine National Wildlife Area


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bubbles%20the%20fish/Scott_Islands_Marine_National_Wildlife_Area_?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Scott Islands Marine National Wildlife Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, it is an informative and helpful article. I learned a lot about an area that I did not previously know existed. You did a good job at properly linking your refences. However, it needs a lead/intro paragraph and, if possible, add sections on how climate change has effected the Wildlife Area and what recreational/tourist activities are available today. There are many resources for an article of this size (but there can always be more). The article is sectioned very well and the organization makes sense.

Geography

I like how you added characteristics and size of all of the individual islands, rather than just the entire area. The sentence "All fives islands span a distance of 11,570.65 km ², the islands extend 10-46 km offshore of Cape Scott." could be made into 2 sentences, or have a semi-colon or 'and' to join them instead of the comma, as they are both independent clauses.

mNWA

In the sentence "...that heavily depend on these islands and waters for breeding, shelter, feeding etc .", try not to add 'ect' in the article.

Species at Risk

It is helpful that you put the status of the species at risk. "Currently, BC is home to about 33% of all Steller sea lions in the Eastern Hemisphere.", BC is in the Wester Hemisphere of the world, so try to explain it a little bit more. Also, especially when there is a statistic, there needs to be a reference. "that were discovered along BC's coast between 1997 and 2010 (according to another study)", reference the other study, rather than leaving it unknown. "It can transmit dangerous bacteria and diseases, endanger human health, contain a wide range of pollutants, increase the amount of nutrients in the nearby water, leading to eutrophication and oxygen-depleted dead zones .", add an 'and' in your list.

Indigenous People

I like how you mentioned the historical and archeology sites, but you could go into a bit more detail about it. Try to find information about the Indigenous people's connection to the creation of the wildlife area.

Flora and Fauna

Very well researched and informative section and good job linking references and relevant articles. The flora section seems to only be cited from 2 articles, consider adding more, diverse resources.