User:Bugcruncher/Environmental racism/Cmhernandez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bugcruncher


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Bugcruncher/Environmental racism - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental racism - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

CONTENT:

The content added will provide more information and insight in the article. You could add a sentence that ties all of the articles topics together and what the reader will be learning about throughout the article. I think your wording was concise and clear. One thing you have written is a quote as a sentence, "Temperatures on a scorching summer day can vary as much as 20 degrees across different parts of the same city, with poor or minority neighborhoods often bearing the brunt of that heat ." I think you could possibly expand more on this instead of just a quote.

TONE & BALANCE:

The content added sounded neutral and was just providing information instead of trying to sway the reader one way or another.

SOURCES & REFERENCES:

Something that I would consider doing, is to put the period in front of the citation. For example, you have something like this, "was relatively minor ." for every citation. Maybe, instead you could do it like this, "was relatively minor. "

I like how you added internal citations within some words. That will help the reader follow along with the information if they got confused.

ORGANIZATION:

There are no spelling errors, YAY.

IMAGES & MEDIA:

N/A. No images or media were added.