User:Bwhitney670/sandbox

Peer Review-

The article only contains two sentences, one of which is a definition and another is an example.

It needs more information about the topic- more examples, why it happens, where it happens. There is only one source listed, but the source at least appears to be reliable. Along with more info, more headers could be added as info is added.

Finding your reliable sources first is a good idea so no false information gets posted. You’ve definitely recognized everything that the article needs to include, and also what order they need to be done in. I don’t see any grammatical errors.

“A growing and changing human population plays an important part on what plants are moved to new locations and which are left untouched.” This sentence is a bit hard to understand. Maybe change to “A growing and changing human population plays an important part in determining which plants are moved to new locations and which plants are left untouched.” The phrase “left untouched” still seems a bit off to me though with the wording. The other sentences are concise and easy to understand. You definitely have a great start and I would continue to add info. If this is something that has a cause then maybe elaborate on that.

Article Evaluation: I looked at and evaluated the article on Ectosymbiosis - The article never really got much of a start. - The lead is only one sentence and the entire article is only two - A reference area was created for this article but with so little in the article there is only 1 reference - The warning flag on the top says the article needs additional citations - Not really any explanation other than a broad coverage so there really cant be any balance in the article - Keeps a neutral stance and the source used is neutral - There has been no changes to it since May so not many people have looked into it - the talk page is completely blank

Progress Tracker: - Added a citation and a new sentence to the article "Anthropization"

The Article I've Chosen:

The article that I picked to edit is biological globalization. I will be working with Eric on this article. What I plan to do to start with is preliminary research like how I used to do for debates. I'm going to start by looking for a group of sources, somewhere in between 7-10, and evaluate them. Most likely about half of them will be weeded out as unreliable or non reputable. Once I have finished with this search and narrowing of sources, I am going to start rough drafted what lines I plan to add as well as how to cite the sources and in what way to do it. Whether it be through short quotes or overall summary, I will start to develop my outline. Once that's done all that will be left is to compile everything together onto the article and put the finishing touches on it.

First Draft Improvements:

The article biological globalization definitely has quite a bit missing from it. All that the article has now is a definition of what biological globalization is as well as one example for what it is. One thing I plan to add if I can find them is areas that are more affected than others. One other interesting thing that I have decided to look into is the human impact on this form of globalization. Two examples of this that I have found so far are in the Mediterranean as well as global grain trades. Biological globalization is strongly influenced by human needs. I have a source for each of these examples but struggling with the rewording at the moment which is why they haven't been included. I work mostly on google docs as well which is where I keep most of my work. My ideas are on there mostly so its difficult to remember to transfer over. For the sake of not knowing the wording I will include the examples as just saying "example" when I want to insert it. As it stands, this is what I have right now.

1. the existing article which I won't change 2. add a new section for areas that will be added in 3. lead sentence for this section - short because it most likely won't have a citation 4. setup sentence for first example which will be cited as well 5. example of Mediterranean globalization 6. (Potential closing sentence for example) - This is optional because it will depend on what there is to say 7. setup for second example with citation 8. example of global trade effects on biological globalization 9. (optional closing sentence for example)

This outline seems bare only because most of where I work my thoughts out are on google docs. I'm going to continue to write it out there and my additions will be able to seen on the article by this week. I will try to remember to add in on this page as well what I have contributed so that way there are two areas on this site that show my work. I will have to talk with Eric about what ideas he has as well so we can make sure there are no overlaps or blank spots. Working together may also spark new ideas which is why this is a very elementary outline. Things are definitely up for change but this gives a little structure to the plan moving forward.

Potential Beginning To Article Edits (Continuation Of First Draft):

A growing and changing human population plays an important part on what plants are moved to new locations and which are left untouched (PNAS). Early signs of biological globalization can be traced back to the mid 1860’s (SSRN). Wheat is an example of biological globalization that appeared early in the developmental timeline (SSRN). Global trading was the beginning of biological globalization which integrated plants to new environments (PNAS). The black francolin is another example as it was originally from the Mediterranean but is now a common eastern gamebird (PNAS).

Sources are relatively hard to find which is why there are only 2 at the moment.