User:Bxwalsh/Andy Jankowiak/TylerMay12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bxwalsh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bxwalsh/Andy_Jankowiak?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft that you made was very well put together with very few mistakes. There were a couple things that I would try to improve like the usage of .com sources, I would try your best to stay away from those and say that two of your sources were .com. Also, everything that you added tied into the "Personal" part of this article perfectly. Lastly, I loved that you added his mom into the personal life because I thought it was wierd she wasn't included but, well job fixing up that awful part of the article. This was ver well done and the sources you had worked!