User:C10ism/Myosatellite cell/Starwarsfan6 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

C10ism


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * multiple sandboxes


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Myosatellite cell

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Ceri, I read your article and your sandboxes and here's my feedback:


 * I like the content added in your sandboxes and I think it's relevant to the topic and could fit in easily.
 * I did find it difficult to find your content, since you have multiple sandboxes, so consider adding it all in the myosatellite cell sandbox, so its more clear.
 * Your content in the sandbox called sandbox is full of good information and you have good sources, but the sentences seem choppy. I think you could make them flow better since its a lot of shorter sentences. Consider paraphrasing some things or using some synonyms in case it's directly copied from the source (which it seems like because of how scientific it sounds). Also, the article itself has a good flow to it so making the sandbox content flow better would make it easier to incorporate.
 * Your article is pretty substantial already, and I think it could use a diagram or two, along with an explanation. It could be of a concept that's difficult to visualize, the myosatellite cell itself, etc.
 * Are you going to add to the structure and function sections? I'm assuming there's more than one function and structure points that could be added.

Overall, your article is pretty substantial already and is well put together. There's a few things to fix/add but it's off to a good start and I like what you've done in your sandboxes.

- Emily