User:C1kschmidt/Forensic toxicology/Cebeck Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

C1kschmidt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:C1kschmidt/Forensic toxicology


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Forensic toxicology

Lead
Your lead section has good information and a through introductory sentence. I would reformat this section to remove the header entitled "Forensic toxicology" so it appears before the table of contents and becomes a true "Lead" section.

I also suggest condensing your lead section because I feel it might contain too much information. For example, I would consider additional sections about what a forensic toxicologist does, and the branches of forensic toxicology. This way, you can rearrange your text to make the lead more of a summary with less specific information.

Content
You've included good, relevant information in your draft. Maybe change the heading "Examples" to "Types of Samples," or something similar to that to ensure the reader has a better idea of what that section will be about.

If you use my suggestion to create a section about the branches of forensic toxicology, I would use the "Postmortem Toxicology" section to talk about about determining cause of death more thoroughly. For example, I did a quick Google search and found this website that speaks about what sample to use in multiple causes of death, including homicide and car accidents that I feel would be an interesting addition to your article.

I like that you've included analytical techniques such as GS-MS and LC-MS and when to use each method. You've included great information, but my primary suggestion is to reorganize in and go into some more detail about the sections you've included.

Tone
You've written from a neutral standpoint and I don't see any biases.

Images
I would definitely consider adding images. There isn't a wide variety of options, but perhaps add images related to GC-MS and LC-MS analyses, giving an example of how these biological samples are analyzed.

Organization
You've included good major sections. However, organization is my primary suggestion for your article. Include more subsections to better organize your information. Consider including sub-sections about cause of death and individual career paths within forensic toxicology.

Overall Impressions
You've done a good job at including good information as a working draft for your article. However as I've stated, consider reorganizing your information and including some more specific information about what you've already added. Overall, good job :)