User:C99L35/Gona, Ethiopia/Syknox1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

C99L35


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:C99L35/Gona, Ethiopia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gona, Ethiopia

Lead
The lead is good and includes significant finds from the site, but you could connect it to human evolution. The main focus of the article is relating to evolution, so outlining that in the lead would help the layperson understand the significance of the article. Perhaps briefly note some major themes that you discuss in later sections, like environmental adaptability, discovery of human remains, tools, etc.

Content
I would rephrase some sentences to be more concise and not worry as much about citing the sources in-text/ with words and describing the studies done. I would state the results/ significance of the study and use the citation tool to back up your statements. Shorter, more concrete sentences help with clarity too, especially if a non-professional is reading the article. If you can condense your paragraphs, that would also help with comprehension and clarity. Maybe consider using bulleted lists to include major findings from each site or to reduce the amount of text. You are good at connecting the subject to significance and explaining “why should I care?”

Tone and Balance
Overall the article maintains a good balance, but be sure to make sure both sides of the argument are represented (e.g. behavioral flexibility) so that the reader can decide which side of the fence they sit on. Many perspectives are represented throughout, so I do not think this article appears skewed.

Sources and References
There are a few sources that are only cited once, is there any other relevant information that you can pull from these? I think some of these contained counterarguments so try searching those for other relevant information to include alongside the majority opinion. You have a good mix of sources from the 90s to present, but consider adding more sources from the last 3-5 years if there is more current research available.

Organization
The section talking about paleoecology could probably be a subheading within the section to help give it better structure. Excavation history could also be its own section outside of archaeology. Some headings could use shorter titles, for example just “Oldowan Archaeological Sites” since you will explain the significance with that section anyway. Looking at the main article, maybe you could also group the “Paleoanthropology” section with Zooarchaeology and Stone Tools since those are all discussing the material remains from the site.

Images and Media
There is one image on the Gona page that shows the major regions and rivers (I assume) of Ethiopia, but the caption on it does not seem to demarcate the Afar and Awash regions since they are not labeled. I would suggest re-captioning the image to something more accurate, or replacing it with an image that does show those regions. Also if there are any images of the human / zooarchaeological/ material culture finds, those would be nice to include as well. Even a lineage map of hominin lineages would be nice to include in the section describing the hominin remains found at the site.