User:CCNorthfield/Chickasaw/Henryp011 Peer Review

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I think it is important that you added information about the interactions between the Chickasaw and the Spanish. This part of the article is engagingly written and has a lot of information. I also like how in the section about Proto Chickasaw people you talked about beliefs and symbolism of more modern Chickasaw people, and not just archaeological evidence. I think that including multiple perspectives like this is really important.

In terms of changes, I think a lot more information needs to be added, Im sure you're working on this. It would also be good for you guys to correct surface level grammatical errors and edit for clarity. Making sure that your sentences are formatted well and easy to follow will make your article easy to read and learn from. These changes would make the article more informative and easier to read, especially for people who aren't familiar with archaeology or indigenous history. In terms of sources, you haven't added very much to your sandbox yet but it looks like you have a lot of really good ones in your bibliography. Keep up the good work with incorporating sources and adding good citations! You could also add some more links to other wikipedia articles, this is really fun and will help your readers contextualize your article. Also while I really like the engaging way in which the section about contact with the Spanish is written, I think you should be really careful to make sure that you write in an academic and neutral tone, I don't think this is a problem yet but it is important that you keep this in mind.

I think the most important thing that you can do as authors is to keep adding good information and to keep editing. It also seems to me like there are big differences between the Proto Chickasaw people, Chickasaw people at the time of contact with the Spanish, and the modern day Chickasaw people who live in Oklahoma. These distinctions are really confusing and are the result of hundreds of years of extremely complicated interactions and conflict. Therefore, I think it is extremely important that you make sure you write about this in a super clear and informative way.

I would like to keep your article in mind when my group writes more about the interaction between the descendents of the Oneota people and Europeans. I really liked the tone that you used and think it would be useful in my article as well.