User:CDD2112/Battle of Tanagra (457 BC)/Serina Jack Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CDD2112


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CDD2112/Battle_of_Tanagra_(457_BC)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Battle of Tanagra (457 BC)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello,

1. The Lead Section

-there were no edits done this section so I have no review

2. Clarity of Article Structure

-You have overall good clarity in the structure of the article, however I might suggest clarify statements such as, "A few years down the road", instead giving a specific number of years rather than generalizations.

3. Coverage Balance

-well done, you cover the relevant points of the battle. You might consider adding some images, often there are reproduction images that show the locations of armies in a specific battle, I don't know there exists one for this though. You could add a map of the area, an image of a major general, an image of Greek soldiers, etc.

4. Content Neutrality

-very good overall neutrality throughout article

5. Sources

-Good mix of primary and secondary sources, however, you might consider getting some more sources that are more recent, only two out of the five are within the last twenty years. You might also think about adding more sources, as this a place the original article to could be improved.