User:CDLR50/Identity (social science)/Skycbradford Peer Review

General info
CDLR50
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CDLR50/Identity_%28social_science%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Identity (social science)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great job with your draft! I enjoyed reading your additions and changes. I feel like they add more depth and explanation to the article, while still maintaining a neutral tone.

I noticed majority of your references were published over ten years ago. They are great additions, so I understand keeping them. I would add a few more that are more recent, even if you cite them in the same sentences with the older ones.

I also saw the note where you pointed out all of the direct quotes. Maybe rewording that whole paragraph to get rid of the direct quotes would be beneficial. Reading that paragraph sounds like it is a personal essay. I think you can adjust it and make it sound better, and more professional.

I think with those changes, the original article will sound so much better. I cannot wait to see what you do with it!