User:CKC29/Border Cave/RobbyGreg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CKC29


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CKC29/Border_Cave?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Border Cave

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead section is concise and briefly mentions all major topics of the article. The introduction sentence puts the Border Cave site into its geographic and topical context (i.e., archaeological site). However, the major topics of Paleoanthropological findings and Archaeological findings. For the general audience that may come across this article, I feel that these sections should be described in more depth during the lead section. Specifically, the interpretations or significant findings of these sections would allow a reader to identify the impact of the Border Cave page without having to dig through the article. Then, given the reader's interest, they can then explore the select topics at their will.

Also, the original article has a map showing the location of Border Cave, this is an important map to keep in the page so that the geographic context stays intact.

Content

Electron spin resonance is defined only after the acronym ESR is used. This should be spelled out before the acronym is used.

The content provided in the Border Cave site is relative to the site context and is up to date. Furthermore, the sections are broken up into clear and logical topics. However, the subsections under Archaeological findings does not have the same subheadings. The MSA subsection have headings for Botanical, Lithic , and faunal remains , but the LSA subsection does not follow these headings. It may be helpful to put Ostrich eggshell and Marine shell into another heading called Botanical remains, fauna can stay within its own heading, whereas the Organic and Lithic tools may fall under a heading titled Technology , which would require changing the Lithic heading in the MSA subsection.

Also, the content in the Lithics heading is concise and links many of the jargon to other Wikipedia topic pages though there are some terms like backed pieces that do not have a Wikipedia page and should be briefly described in the text with appropriate references.

There are some terms in the Paleoanthropological findings topic that could use a link to other Wikipedia articles like Homo erectus, Iron Age, and accelerator mass spectrom

The line at the end of the Paleoenvironment section is not applicable for the following Excavation History topic: "The below sections describe the flora and fauna that occur near Border Cave." I would recommend removing this statement.

Images

The images of fauna are a good addition to this article but if you can find images on Wikimedia for some stone implements like backed tools, groundstones, and blades, these could help illustrate these different technologies for the reader.