User:CLo12345/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Focal dystonia

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
This article, though rated mid-importance and class C quality, does not elaborate much into the symptoms, diagnosis, prognosis, causes, prevention, specialists, and other forms of treatment for Focal Dystonia. I am particularly interested in this topic with my career plans as a Performing Arts Medicine specialist and Child Neurologist (though mostly an adult disease in performing artists). It is important as this disease can be devastating to careers of Performing Artists if they do not know what it is and where to get help, and even most health care providers do not know how to treat or where to find referrals in this specific population.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section: The introductory sentence is excellent, stating the topic concisely and accurately in a single sentence. Summary is Poor, not summarizing the rest of the article, while missing some key points, including focal dystonia treatment, prognosis, and certain forms of focal dystonia and its impact on careers and livelihood. Context is poor and does not contain enough information about the rest of the article.

Content: Content is fair as it covers some of the topic area, however misses many points that the general public or providers may be looking for. This would include prognosis, other forms of treatment, prevention, and other forms of focal dystonia.

Tone and Balance: Tone is excellent and remains neutral. The balance is good as it presents one side and ignores minority views, that being other forms of treatment and some of the patient's perspective.

Sources and References: Sources and references are excellent. Most are available and appropriate for genre.

Organization and Writing Quality: Organization is Fair as the sections are confusing with some diagnostic information in the causes section, anecdotal evidence presented as treatment instead of elaborating on the treatment plan.

Images and Media: There are no images or media, ranking this as fair.

Talk Page Discussion: There is discussion in the Talk page about changes needed to be done with inaccurate information, poor organization, lack of citation, and adding more information. This has been rated C-Class in quality and Mid-Improtance by the WikiProject Medicine group.

Overall Impressions: The overall status is fair to poor. The article does touch on a few key elements that most of the general public may not know. However it does not go into enough detail about the disease or other facets. This article can be improved through changing its organization, adding more detailed information about the disease, and providing information that could be useful for the special population of Performing Artists and providers.