User:CSL12345/Alexander Girard/Emmarshelton Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CSL12345, Chang1023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Alexander Girard
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

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 * In the Early life section elaborating more on how Alexander refined his skills and how he did so would be helpful.
 * Adding more information about how he got the career he did such as how he achieved the design for Herman Miller and the work he did to get to that point of success.
 * I enjoyed the section on the Herman Miller textiles and the information about his process of making the textiles was very clear :)
 * The addition of pictures of the textiles and furniture he made might be helpful to get some cited visuals.
 * Adding citations and more information to sections- Georg Jensen, John Deere, and The Girard Foundation. I think going into more depth about how these projects came available to him and the overall process he went through while accomplishing these projects would make these sections a little more clear.
 * More information about the section Wooden Dolls would be helpful. I got confused about what exactly these wooden dolls were about and the background for how and why they were created.
 * Overall the article has a very clear and neutral tone just needs some additions to some of the sections and it will be even more great! Good job!