User:CSL12345/Alexander Girard/JoiaD20 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: There is no lead, most definitely will need one with all the sections of the existing article. Be sure to generally mention the topics of each section.

Content: A very small amount of content compared to the original article, I hope you are adding more? Or supplementing the new information into the existing article? It also appears to be just bullet points, but I assume that this was an outline of some sort.

Tone and Balance: N/A

Sources and References: Links are fine, need to add a heading labeled "References" before the list of sources.

Organization: I feel like there are a few sentences that belong in another section. In the "Designers" section, "After Memphis'....Memphis' original work." should be at the end of the "Background" section.

Images and Media: N/A