User:CSL12345/Alexander Girard/Jtknott Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CSL12345, Chang1023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CSL12345/Alexander Girard


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Alexander Girard

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Upon reviewing your sandbox draft and the original article, I find your additions to the article to be enlightening and relevant. I noticed that when I went to the article, the sections titled, "Wooden Dolls" and "Font Design" had the word [edit] in the title. I am not sure if this is something that happens when we add information to an article or if that was just left in there but I do not see it necessary. I think the Lead of the article is well written and straight to the point and it is understandable that you did not change that. I think the inclusion of the awards and exhibitions held by Alexander Girard are a good addition because this information adds emphasis on his impact of design and how he is a relevant designer with notable achievements. It would have been interesting to learn more about his early life or background if more information on that is available or able to be found. However, I think all sentences and information included are concise and to the point and add good information to the article.