User:CT.EM20/Brandy Nālani McDougall/Megan808 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CT.EM20


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CT.EM20/Brandy_Nālani_McDougall
 * Evaluate the drafted changes
 * Aloha CT.EM20,
 * I love the article you created on Brandy Nālani McDougall!
 * Two small things you could consider:
 * 1. The "Hawaiʻi, Maui, and Kauaʻi lineages" seems like an awkward phrasing. Possible rephrase to ancestral lineages (or ties) to Hawaiʻi, Maui, and Kauaʻi islands or some other phasing.
 * 2. Jumping down to "profession" the "Her fields of study include Indigenous literatures" you could add a ; after include (i.e. "include;")
 * Besides that the article is well balanced and informative. Additionally the links work and the sources types vary and are credible sources. Very well written and the "awards and distinctions format gives me a vision for how to better list my articles achievements without saying "in (year), Francis did (accomplishment)" over and over like how my article currently is written.
 * Mahalo,
 * Megan
 * P.S. Also really hoping this is the correct person, I saw that Bronsonazama peer reviewed my article and yours so I assume you are my other article peer review since the link in the class assignment comment led to a google doc that I could not access. >_<