User:CabbageP/Triptolemus/Old Crooked leg Peer Review

General info
CabbageP
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:CabbageP/Triptolemus
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Triptolemus

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) I would say you have done a good job at spacing out the information that is given in comparison to the original article, it was also a good idea to add a citation that just does not sit at the end of the paragraph, overall i like what you have done with your lead, good job!
 * 2) I would say that your articles flow is good and it is a smart idea to add a new section that could have some additional info, while also removing and editing some parts would make the flow of the article better. To me I would say that the table does kind of disrupt the reading of the article, I would say it stands out a bit too much but that is just my option.
 * 3) In my understanding of looking at the history of Triptolemus, I would say you have done a good job at keeping that article form a dominate view point, but it could be useful if possible to add some sections to the see also section, and maybe another primary sources for information if possible.
 * 4) In reading the article I would say that it is in a neutral tone I did not see any edits that you made that would give me the hint that it made it less of a neutral tone so I would say good job.
 * 5) When checking out all of your source I would say you are good for the most part but when looking at the lives of necromancy's sources I would maybe check in with the professor or the wiki help people on if it still is in copyright or not if you are planning to use quotes from that source.