User:CalUser777/CalUser777/The Politics and Economics of Somalian Warlords/Bot.mod22 Peer Review

= Mark's peer review = Good job on the writing. The draft is concise and informative, yet descriptive.

I think there are several points you can expand on, such as: who are the warlords, like were they the most respected in tribes or was it just luck that enabled them to gain power; how does warlord territory control work, is it by cities, tribes, resources; are there any efforts to take control back or mobilizing the central government; any other interventions by neighboring states or other countries?

I think you could provide more specificity on the following: "misery" (first paragraph) what does this mean, specifically; being cautious of using the word "world" to generalize a reaction or feeling.

Regarding structure, it would really be helpful there were more sections, such as background, state response, warlords, etc. Furthermore, please try to cite a source after a strong claim.

As a reader, I would appreciate if you could talk about whether there is conflict between warlords and any figures on civilian deaths.

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Good job on the writing. The draft is concise and informative, yet descriptive.

I think there are several points you can expand on, such as: who are the warlords, like were they the most respected in tribes or was it just luck that enabled them to gain power; how does warlord territory control work, is it by cities, tribes, resources; are there any efforts to take control back or mobilizing the central government; any other interventions by neighboring states or other countries?

I think you could provide more specificity on the following: "misery" (first paragraph) what does this mean, specifically; being cautious of using the word "world" to generalize a reaction or feeling.

Regarding structure, it would really be helpful there were more sections, such as background, state response, warlords, etc. Furthermore, please try to cite a source after a strong claim.

As a reader, I would appreciate if you could talk about whether there is conflict between warlords and any figures on civilian deaths.