User:Callencamp/Jane Caminos/Ansleyb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Callencamp


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Callencamp/Jane_Caminos?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think the lead contains a lot of good, detailed information about Caminos's life; however, I think there could be more of an overview of what happens throughout the rest of her life in the "Personal Life" section. For example, listing a brief summary of what she did after college might be helpful. Either that, or creating a true 'Lead' section which contains a brief description or overview of everything would be helpful. I like how your tone and content are neutral, and how whenever you put something that goes more into opinion territory, you state whose idea it is, and make sure to maintain an impartial point of view. Your sources seem reliable and varied as well. Great work!