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 * Specific Phobia
 * Specific phobia

Assignment # 3

 * Proposed Changes My proposed changes include the following: ·      Moving the sentence “Specific phobia affects up to 12% of people at some point in their life.” from the introductory paragraph to the Epidemiology section.  ·      Replacing the following sentence in the Epidemiology section: “Specific phobias have a one-year prevalence of 8.7% in the USA with 21.9% of the cases being severe, 30.0% moderate and 48.1% mild.” with the following statement: “Specific phobias have a lifetime prevalence rate of 7.4% and a one-year prevalence of 5.5% according to data collected from 22 different countries. In the USA, the lifetime prevalence rate is 12.5% and a one-year prevalence rate of 9.1%.”   Rationale for proposed change.        I am proposing the above changes in order to update the epidemiological information with more recent statistical data. The epidemiological data currently cited is from the years 2002 and 2005, whereas my updated data is from a paper published in 2017. I also inserted additional statistical information on countries outside the United States in order to make the article more inclusive and representative. Lastly, I propose to move a sentence regarding epidemiological data that is found in the Introductory paragraph to the Epidemiology section to enhance organization and logical flow of the article.        Some controversy around these planned changes involved differing opinions about what statistical information should be included and if the epidemiological data should focus on the USA as it currently does or if data from other countries should be included. As a group, we decided to update the information based on the USA, as well as include the international data found in the paper by Wardenaar and colleagues (2017) that examined the prevalence rates of specific phobia across 22 different countries. Another source of controversy involved deciding what epidemiological data to include such as the differing rates of prevalence across high- and low-income countries, the incidence rates, and the 30-day prevalence rates. As a group, we decided to include the one-year and lifetime prevalence rates, as we wanted to ensure that we were not going to overwhelm the reader with statistical information.   Source:   Wardenaar KJ, Lim CC, Al-Hamzawi AO, Alonso J, Andrade LH, Benjet C, Bunting B, De Girolamo G, Demyttenaere K, Florescu SE, Gureje O. The cross-national epidemiology of specific phobia in the World Mental Health Surveys. Psychological medicine. 2017 Jul;47(10):1744.  Critique of Source       The paper by Wardenaar and colleagues (2017) is a recent article published in a reputable journal (Psychological medicine) and it is a secondary source. There are also no reported conflicts of interest in this paper. However, this paper has several potential limitations that I did consider before deciding to use it a source. First, the information about lifetime prevalence was reported retrospectively which could have led to recall bias. This could have impacted the true lifetime prevalence and comorbidity rates. Second, not all phobia types were systematically assessed which could have led to underreporting. Lastly, the results are based on DSM-IV criteria for specific phobia and using the DSM-5 criteria may have led to different results. With these limitations in mind, I decided to proceed with the inclusion of the data from this source, as its strengths outnumbered its potential limitations.

What to post on the talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template