User:Cam Hist/Domestic worker/Audkal Peer Review

General info:

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cam's


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cam Hist/Domestic worker


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Domestic worker

{| class="wikitable" Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:
 * Peer review
 * Peer review

Lead
Guiding questions:

(I don't believe the Lead has been edited. It is not in the Sandbox Draft)


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:

Yes No Yes
 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

Yes No No No
 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

There are some sentences that need sources. For example, the sentence "In the United States, slavery legally ended in 1865, however, the Freedmen's Bureau informed the former slaves now classified as freedmen and women that they could either sign labor contracts with white planters or be evicted from the land that they had lived on." In fact, several sentences in this section "Blacks post-Civil War to World War I." Yes Yes Yes Yes I don't think so. JSTOR links do not work
 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization
Guiding questions:

Yes No For the most part, yes. However, I think the Modern Examples section should go last. I think that would make more sense, to have the most recent section be last, so that the article is in chronological order.
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Additional questions (from Canvas):

 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources?

Yes


 * Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list? If not, can you think of anything we've read that might be useful for them?

Yes


 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material?

Definitely.


 * Does your peer add historical context to their article?

Yes. I think this was one of the greatest strengths of the draft.


 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?

I think it would be helpful to explain why you focus on certain countries. You could add a sentence or two before the paragraphs on Guatemala and Brazil, for instance.
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