User:Cam Hist/Domestic worker/Tsweeney617 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cam Hist


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cam Hist/Domestic worker


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * I think that the beginning parts of the content is in its early stages so I don't quite see a lead paragraph yet.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * I think that there might already be a lead in the original article but I think as mentioned in the first part of Cam's content is explaining what will be added and how it will be incorporated.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Again I don't see a lead yet bc it is in the early works
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * N/A
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * N/A

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * the content is relevant to the topic and dives deeper into exactly what a domestic worker is and the details of that work.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * For a majority of the sources they are up-to-date. There is also a good use of sources used from class readings.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * I think everything that is added is relevant
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * It definitely addresses topics related to historically underrepresented populations because it is talking about African Americans and Native Americans during the time of slavery and indentured servitude.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content looks very neutral. I think that there are a lot of stats and facts that are presented so it does not seem as opinion based.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * I think there are some facts that don't have as much back up or seem a little bit more opinion related. I think this is mostly in the paragraphs that are a little bit less developed and some of the sources are still being worked out.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * I think that there are some viewpoints that are a little underrepresented. I think maybe just the history behind who worked as a domestic worker and what that entailed specifically. I think we get a broad overview of it. I think that there are a lot more modern examples of the topic which I think could be put more towards the bottom to make it more chronological.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * I don't think the content looks to persuade the reader at all. It does a nice job of informing the reader of the issues but I think that there could be some more in-depth historical examples.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * yes the content is backed up by reliable secondary source. I wasn't able to click on any of the sources because I think Cam has had issues with citing (it is very confusing) but I recognized a lot of the sources are from class readings which is all reliable.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
 * I was unable to check the sources because they were not all linked but because class readings were included I know that the information presented does reflect the info from those sources.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * yes they are thorough. They do a nice job reflecting the literature on the topic as well as presenting enough info to know what the source is about.
 * Are the sources current?
 * yes they are all mostly current
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Based on the readings that we have done in class and since a majority of those are being used here I think that there is a diverse spectrum of authors.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
 * I think I would check out JSTOR they have a lot of good journals and books that you can pull scholarly info from.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * I wasn't able to click on any links.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * The content is very well-written I think that it is a little bit jumbled in the bottoms areas but it is mentioned by the author that there were areas that were still in the works. I think it reads very easy especially in the modern examples section. I do think that there are certain parts that need to be more clear when it comes to examples or talking about specific facts pulled from sources. I think that there could be some more content added to each sections and give more background details to each part. There are some things that are pretty generalized. Like in the "Common Problems" section there are just some general assumptions that they had hardships rather than factual evidence. I think you could give some examples of common problems and what they are and how they affected the workers.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Not that I can tell
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The content is organized into different sections and I think it is very clear what major points will be talked about.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * It seems that the content added will definitely improve the quality of the article especially because it seems that the focus of the article is the modern examples and the original article may be a little out-dated. I think this will make it more complete.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * I think that since the majority of the writing is the "modern examples" section that maybe this should be more of the focus and the general theme rather than jumping back and forth between now and back then.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * I think that this is on the right track and that the article is overall in a great direction. I would say to just organize it in a more chronological way so that it flows to each section. You could probably combine a few sections since they talk about the same things but overall each section helps move you down the page nicely.


 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources? Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list? If not, can you think of anything we've read that might be useful for them?
 * yes there is 5-7 reliable sources, although they are not linked properly yet. Multiple are from the class readings. I think that the school library online JSTOR site has some good sources that could help?
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article?
 * I think that the original article is very historical so they are adding some more modern examples but the information in the rest of the paragraphs is historical based. I think they should move the modern examples to the bottom so it is more chronological.
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material
 * yes the topic is linked to the course material. But I think that the information presented doesn't relate as much to the home as an idea and a place which I think could be linked some more with physical examples.
 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?
 * I would consider adding some more background info within each section like adding what it is about rather than jumping right in.