User:Cameronkalantar/Migrant education/KautharIbrahim Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cameron Kalantar

Newcomer education
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 *  https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Cameronkalantar/Migrant_education&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no 
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yasminemahm./Newcomer_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Migrant education

Evaluate the drafted changes
 Migrant education 

Lead

Currently don't see a lead updated yet. Adding a legend and putting in some of the article into the sandbox would make it easier to understand the connection.

Content

Overall, I really liked the content that you had added and it is relevant to the article. All of the sources are up to date and were linked correctly. Adding a couple of sentences to connect the article to your content would make things a little more clear.

Tone and Balance

Your edits to the article have a neutral point of view. The content doesn't persuade me to favor one view point over the other. Maybe linking another wikipedia article to some of the concepts you use such as "deep learning" would provide more balanced point of views.

Sources and References

The links work and the sources are up to date. I don't think quotes are necessary for the article? not sure though. You have the linked citations, I do not think you need to cite the author again in parenthesis.

Organization

Overall, the content is well organized, and easy to read. One suggestion could be separating the paragraph into two sections. One section you can talk about the international network and the second section you can talk about the specific educational strategies the schools use.

Images and Media

There are no images included in the article, maybe adding some of the students at these schools could be cool!

Overall Impressions

Organization, Content, and grammer are all overall good! Awesome job!

 Newcomer Education 

Lead

Engaging, and helps connect your content and the articles content together

Content

Overall, the content is relevant to the article and adds important information on the topic. I especially like the part were you added that legacies of institutionalized racism and xenophobia can be exacerbated in cases of refugee resettlement as explained by the theory of segmented assimilation

Sources and References

All links work, are up to date, and are relevant to the content in the article. I suggest adding a source to the part where you speak about ineffective refugee education. I also suggest adding more to the theory of segmented assimilation.

Tone and Balance

Your edits to the article have a neutral point of view. The content doesn't persuade me to favor one view point over the other.

Organization

Overall, really good organization. Easy to connect your thoughts to the information already placed in the article. Really good job on this!

Images and Media

No media but I don't think its necessary to add some to this article

Overall Impressions

Organization, Content, and grammer are all overall good! Awesome job!