User:Cameronsimons24/American Sports Activism/CarsonJones06 Peer Review

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Cameronsimons24


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 * User:Cameronsimons24/American Sports Activism - Wikipedia


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Be sure to include a concise and easy introduction to this article. Brief overview of the sections and what will be included. Make sure not to make it too detailed, however.

Content: While this is a new Wikipedia page it is a good start for the content within. The content that has been added is relevant to the topic and up to date from what I can tell. This article does a great job at addressing equity gaps by representing the movement of marginalized groups. I do think you should add a section about Native American sports and their activism in representing their culture (Lacrosse & Shinny) because their culture is often disregarded in the sense of American Sports, and I believe would address an equity gap in Wikipedia. I also think adding a section of important figures would be awesome to read also. Muhammad Ali was a huge activist in protesting the Vietnam War (just someone to think about). Lastly, connect it to communication! Think Cheesewright would really enjoy that aspect.

Tone and Balance: The content that has been added is neutral and does not try to persuade the reader to one side or another, just presents the information around American Sports Activism.

Sources and References: The sources that are in the article look reliable and the links work. I would suggest trying and integrating more sources within the sentences themselves. It seems like there is only one source after each section. Integrating sources within the sections more would strengthen this article. Especially in the history section since there is none there.

Organization: The organization makes sense and follows a good order as far as I can tell. Make sure to include a lead section for the reader to get a grasp at what the rest of the article is talking about. It is concise and clear on the methodology of the article. No grammar or spelling errors that I can tell from.

Images and Media: Make sure to add photos of the people and events you are referring to add quality to this article, and to caption them. (If you are planning on adding photos or videos)

New Article Requirements: Try to link this article to topics or other ideas to other Wikipedia sites. It would be good for the reader to explore certain events or figures in more detail when you refer to them.

Overall Impressions: I think this is a great start to article that has so much information behind and that can be added. The content you have so far is great and I think it is engaging and educational for the reader. For a new article, this is a great start (excited to see how it progresses and how much you get done). There are some improvements I would recommend. Include more sources within each section. Think about including Native American sports in this because they're sports are often underrepresented and not acknowledged for the activism, they play in bringing awareness and appreciation to their culture. Also hoping you are doing a section for influential figures (I know that might be too much, but I think it would add great detail and information for the article overall) Lastly, try to connect it to topics in communication. Good job though!