User:Camilla vellon1/sandbox

Article Evaluation https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_feminism

I choose to evaluate the article "Black feminism", because although I don't know much about feminism in general I feel like exploring a specific area will help me learn more in totality. Especially being multi-racial I found this article to be very relevant with the information I was provided along with learning about key Black feminist and their call to action I found very insightful and in powering.

I believe since the article I choose was a general article about the basis of Black feminism, I would say no information was out of date. It actually gave me a very nice timeline to work with as I read about the events, people and change during the time. I was very glad to read about relevant information pertaining to Black Lives Matter because originally I never considered the two to be associated with another, so that was a great new was to look at the movement.

As of now I do not see anything that should be changed about the article but since it was a general overview of Black feminism which is what I originally sought out, I would say that maybe next time I could get into more specifics. This was a very actual article that offered great citations and references when referring to terms, people and events. In addition, it remained neutral, which deemed it to be very insightful and thus creditable.

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(Evaluate your article/ Think about sources)
I plan to contribute a greater deal of current topics related to Black feminism in social justice movements. Because black feminism is a complex concept that I believe needs more depth considering its a fairly new ideology, so moving forward I plan to gain more knowledge and understanding of current black feminist movements to add in addition to my chosen article. More specifically, the first assigned article I choose to review is Titled: Black Lives Matter: Why Black Feminist? I believe relating to my previous answer this will be a great stepping stone for me to use when evaluating further topics.

Assigned article:


 * I would like to contribute to my assigned article updated information of current social events/ movements that are shaping society, but specifically black feminism.
 * Additional would like to add new faces in the Black Feminist that have made a prominent name for themselves in Black Feminism.
 * Lastly, is if I see an area that more detail would either be needed or benefit the article ,I would love to be in a place to contribute to that as well.

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(Add to an article) Due: 10/7
The mother's of Trayvon Martin, Michael Brown, Oscar Grants have all been active members of the Black Lives Matter movement, when their son's were killed by police officers. Each women credits themselves as Black feminist as well as Mothers of the Movement.

APA citation: Sebastian, M. (2017, October 11). Who Are the 'Mothers of the Movement' Speaking at the DNC? Retrieved from https://www.elle.com/culture/career-politics/news/a38111/who-are-mothers-of-the-movement-dnc/

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(First Draft) Due: 10/22
The mother's of Trayvon Martin, Michael Brown, Oscar Grants have all been active members of the Black Lives Matter movement, when their son's were killed by police officers. Each women credits themselves as Black feminist as well as Mothers of the Movement. In addition these women have used their voices given the platform of their children untimley death to not only raise awareness of the black community but also black women. Sybrina Fulton (mother of Trayvon Martin), has also contributed to the political realm and most recently had joined forced with 2016 presidential candidate Hilary Clinton focusing on issues concerning gun violence, women's health care and teen pregnancy which each effect the women in the black community substantially.

(Peer Review Article) Due: 10/28
1.) No this article does not lead the reader to a particular point of view, this article addition from this paragraph is well formulated and comes from an educational standpoint of accurate information.

2.) The last sentence may be suggestive or on a line line in my viewpoint of becoming not as neutral "This then lead to the idea that a male-dominated society was oppressive and flawed." I feel that if additional information was adding/ sources to backup the last part it wouldn't being hanging on the edge in my head.

3.) No, anytime information is presented the author states "according to" which takes away any room for unethical/reliable claims.

4.) No, because the context of the paragraph focuses on the origin of cultural feminism's beginning, which is an educational and factual paragraph that is very concrete. So because it's a neutral portion of context, there was no deeming negative or positive information.

5.) The author has 2 sources which was appropriately placed and cited with accurate information. The only concern I have is the last sentences which I have stated in question 2.

Final Article
In 2013, "Mothers of the Movement" brought together Sybrina Fulton the mother of Trayvon Martin, Lezley McSpadden the mother of Michael Brown, Gwen Carr the mother of Eric Garner, Geneva Reed-Veal mother of Sandra Bland, Cleopatra Pendleton-Cowley mother of Hadiya Pendleton, Maria Hamilton mother of Dontre Hamilton and Lucy McBath mother of Jordan Davis. These seven African American women have lost their son or daughter due to police violence. These women have used their voices not only to promote Black Lives Matter but have also made the conscious effort of joining forces in other areas of inequality. Mother of the Movement joined actress and singer Janelle Monae on the Women's March in Washington in January of 2017 after the inauguration of President Donald Trump. In addition, these women appeared in Beyonce's short film, "LEMONADE"  of her debut album where the women held photos of their children who had passed away.

Black Lives Matter aided the effort for the "Right to Know" bill in October of 2018. The “Right to Know” bills author Senator Nancy Skinner, authorizes public access of internal investigations when police kill people or are found guilty of serious misconduct. The families of those killed by police rallied in support of this bill and offered public testimony of their own stories and the horrific ordeal of not knowing where a loved one is. This monumental breakthrough gave Black Lives Matter huge success because in the state of California where the bill had originated is also the same state with the highest number of civilians killed by police occurs.

Summary of changes and additions made
In the Black Feminism article there was very in the section of Black Lives Matter, close to only 6-8 sentences. This movement is seen as so monumental that it was only fair to contribute more and updated information about this movement and how it relates to Black Feminism. I focused on adding two crucial pieces of information to the article that I found much needed for a completed section of the Black Lives Matter section on the Wikipedia page. First, I included the Mothers of the Movement which is a group of African American mothers whose son or daughter was killed by police officers and how they use their voice to advocate for Black Live Matter, Women's Right and mental health which is a great representation of Black feminism because of the intersectionality that these women have prided themselves on. In addition, I also mentioned a bill past just within the last two months called "Right to Know" which gained huge support and advocacy from Black Lives Matter as they rallied in support of this bill that would help individuals locate their loved one. Especially within the Black Lives Matter movement this has been an issue case by case of family members not being able to locate their loved one before it was too late.