User:Camlak43/Okanagan Nation Alliance/SkyyRincon Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Camlak43's article on the Okanagan Nation Alliance.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Camlak43/Okanagan_Nation_Alliance?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Okanagan Nation Alliance

Evaluate the drafted changes
Yes, the lead has been updated to include the new content added by my peer. Yes, the lead includes an introductory sentence that is concise and clear in describing the topic. The lead does include brief descriptions from the other major sections.

The content added is relevant to the topic, up-to-date and deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps. It addresses Indigenous peoples which are part of underrepresented populations.

The content is neutral. It does not seem to be overrepresenting one viewpoint over the other and does not appear heavily biased. It does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or another.

The sources are thorough, current and written by a diverse spectrum of authors. The content is backed up by a reliable source and it accurately reflects what the source says. The links all seem to work.

The content added is well written, concise, clear and easy to read. There are no spelling or grammar errors. The content is well organized and broken down into sections about each individual band of Indigenous peoples.

There are no images or media but I believe it would enhance the understanding of the topic and would also make the article more appealing visually. I would recommend using a photo of the Syilx Okanagan people, I found this photo on Creative Commons which is labeled as public domain which is safe to use: https://wordpress.org/openverse/image/c04b6ef1-72dd-4abe-822d-5b74e299487a