User:Campenhe6493/Epidemiology of measles/Larsonem7825 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Campenhe6493)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Campenhe6493/Epidemiology_of_measles?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Epidemiology of measles

Article
When Initially reading the article, it appears that it is cited very well. There were only a few notes on the talk page about some confusing numbers that don't fit well with each other or contradict other information present. The biggest problem I saw, taking from the talk page again, is the structure of the article. It seems that some of the editors feel that some of the information in the article isn't really all that relevant. statistics seem to be somewhat randomly chosen and inserted.

The "Lead" is very short. It successfully implies the importance of this topic. I think the topic of vaccinations and why vaccinations are low right now would be a good addition because it seems that each regional paragraph touches on the prevalence of vaccinated individuals and unvaccinated individuals that got measles during the outbreak that occurred.

From what I can tell, the information presented appears to be neutral.

From what I see, maybe the "Incidence" paragraph could be added to if there is any information out there regarding 2021 and 2022 data.

Rearranging information from the "Outbreak" paragraph into the regional subheadings that they are discussing. It seems to me that data isn't necessarily needed under outbreaks because the most recent information in there is from 2014. If you wanted to put the most recent outbreak information under that heading that might work.

The talk page also mentioned something about a 2019 worldwide outbreak.

Incidence
In developed countries, death occurs in 1 to 2 cases out of every 1,000 (0.1% - 0.2%). (This is a faulty link. I went and found the CDC page for Measles (Rubeola) https://www.cdc.gov/measles/index.html This statistic may be worth looking into and changing if more recent data is available).

Increased immunization has led to an estimated 78% drop in measles deaths among UN member states. (These MDG reports are from 2013 and 2014. I wonder if the SDG reports would have a more recent statistic).

Measles is a leading cause of vaccine-preventable childhood mortality. (This may need a citation)

'''I believe your 2nd and 4th citations are the same. You may want to reuse the 2nd citation so you don't have so many resources piling up at the end.'''

"Measles eradication has been challenging for many countries to maintain herd immunity. Due to political unrest, economic challenges, and accessibility to healthcare and proper vaccinations achieving proper vaccination levels in developing countries has halted. "Another challenge faced worldwide is vaccination hesitancy. The World Health Organization and Centers for Disease Control and Prevention have listed this is a top ten challenge to global health in reducing the incidence of measles." A version of these two sentences would be a good statement to add to the "lead" paragraph. Just be sure to cite the information.

Outbreak Paragraph
As of May 2011, over 17,000 cases of measles had so far been reported from France between January 2008 and April 2011, including 2 deaths in 2010 and 6 deaths in 2011. Over 7,500 of these cases fell in the first three months of 2011, and Spain, Turkey, Macedonia, and Belgium have been among the other European countries reporting further smaller outbreaks. The French outbreak has been specifically linked to a further outbreak in Quebec in 2011, where 327 cases have been reported between January and June 1, 2011, and the European outbreaks in general have also been implicated in further small outbreaks in the US, where 40 separate importations from the European region had been reported between January 1 and May 20. Could this paragraph be distributed between the paragraph on France and under the "Europe" heading?

In 2014 many unvaccinated US citizens visiting the Philippines, and other countries, contracted measles, resulting in 288 cases being recorded in the United States in the first five months of 2014, a twenty-year high. Could this go under United States?

In Vietnam, in the measles epidemic in the beginning of 2014, as of April 19 there were 8,500 measles cases and 114 fatalities, and as of May 30 there were 21,639 measles cases and 142 fatalities. and this under Heading "Asia" subheading "Vietnam"?

'''I mentioned earlier how these are not considered very recent outbreaks anymore so they could probably be placed in their own categories. Maybe finding more recent examples of outbreaks that spread to other countries?'''

I think your #3 citation and #7 citation are the same if you want to reuse one citation.

and citation #8 is a repeat of citation #5

'''I think what you have written is perfect for the outbreak section. This is all relevant information to now, whereas the information currently in the outbreak section in the article is outdated.'''

South Africa Section
'''Good updated information here. Only additional information that could be added would be their vaccination status to give more details as to how measles has been eliminated.'''