User:Campenhe6493/Epidemiology of measles/Mohrra3748 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Campenhe6493


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 * User:Campenhe6493/Epidemiology of measles

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The author begins by updating and adding relevant statistics that greater reflect the current state of the disease. the statistics added in this section are easy to understand and the writing style flows well with the rest of the section. All sources for these statistics appear reputable and trustworthy. The last three paragraphs in the incidence portion of the draft add a great enhancement of reality to the rest of the ideas presented. The author does a great job of remaining neutral and providing many various reasons why measles eradication has been difficult. Overall the content added in this section blends well with the rest of the wiki article, increasing credibility and relevance.

In the drafted outbreak section, the first two sentences are a little difficult to read but the information presented is relevant to the topic. The last sentence of this paragraph could be added to the second paragraph and further discuss the efficacy of the vaccine and how it changed the magnitude of outbreaks in the past vs. present. The ideas presented in this section are relevant and add an updated view of outbreaks.

The last section of the draft updates the statistics from the original article. This is a great addition to the relevancy and credibility of the article as a whole! I appreciate that the author added statistics for numerous countries and used reliable sources. Some of the sentences could be edited to help them fit within the article itself, but providing the statistics for now was a great starting point.