User:Camsara99/Marriage in ancient Greece

Lead

 * The Lead is relatively ok but could use some basic upgrades to sentance structure and format to make it feel less like a list of facts.
 * I want to make it a bit more of an introduction to the subject as a whole as opposed to a list of just the more stand out facts from the article.

Content

 * Large portions of the sections focus on ancient Spartan traditions. Rather than have this take a large amount of space in various sections, perhaps "Marriage in Ancient Sparta" should be it's own section with a few sub-sections if needed. The same could potentially be done for Athens, as we have the most infomation about each of these city-states. This would also minimize potential for readers to mix up traditions of specific areas as being the case for all of Greece.
 * There are some opportunities to link to other relevant articles that were not taken (ex. when Gorgo is mentioned without being named, despite Leonidas' article being linked in his name)
 * The "Dates for Marriage" section is too short to exist as it really does. There should either be more information added or the section should be changed to a subsection in an appropriate category.
 * There is some conflicting information given at times due to the way in which it is presented (ex. "Engagement" section implying that all engagements are won through competiton.)
 * There is definitely more information to be added about "Marriage Celebration" - a category which would also benefit from being named a more appropraite "Marriage Traditions"
 * There is also definitely more information available on "Divorce"

Tone and Balance

 * The article is definitely neutral
 * There was no noticalbe instances of bias.
 * The article leans more towards being about exclusively about Athens and Sparta
 * The article would benefit from a few sentance structure edits which would make it more pleasing to read.

Sources and References

 * The sources are severely lacking, and 1 of the 2 present links doesn't work.

Organization

 * The organization is ok, but could really benefit from some updates and additions.
 * Some sections should be renamed and merged
 * There should be a section for "Marriage in Ancient Sparta" and "Marriage in Ancient Athens" to adress the more sepcific details - these cvould maybe be addressed as subsections within each section as well

Images and Media

 * The one image does not have much information.
 * The image is not well-captioned
 * As far as I can tell the image present adheres to Wikipedia's copyright regulations
 * There should be more paintings or vases depicting relevant details which could be included

Checking the talk page

 * The talk page doesn't have any very recent suggestions or updates that I feel are relevant to the updates I would like to include
 * The article doesn't seem to be rated
 * The article is a part of many WikiProjects

Overall impressions

 * The article does not seem to have much of a status overall
 * This article seems really underdevloped. I think there is a lot more information that could be included.

Potential Added Sources
The Gift in Antiquity - Marriage Gifts in Ancient Greece - From "Gift in Antiquity"

Age and Innocence: Female Transitions to Adulthood in Late Antiquity

Dangerous Gifts: Ideologies of Marriage and Exchange in Ancient Greece

Dangerous Gifts: Gender and Exchange in Ancient Greece. by Deborah Lyons. Princeton: Princeton University Press 2012.

The Gamos of Hera - From "The Sacred and the Feminine in Ancient Greece"

Ancient Marriage in Myth and Reality