User:Can7f5/Urbanization in Africa/JamesS&T3530 Peer Review

General info
Can7f5
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Can7f5/Urbanization in Africa
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Urbanization in Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
The organization of the topic is easy to follow and understand. I would consider adding more citations in the Early History section to add credibility to the first few sentences of the article. Make sure that you are including the page numbers of your sources in the citations. The original page does not seem to have any citations for the West Africa section. Consider finding where this information came from or remove it from the article because it is not backed by any sources.

Some minor edits to this sentence so that it is more clear and flows easier;

"The growth and strength the 3 kingdoms of Mali, Ghana, and Songhai can be attributed to their fertile and easily farmable environment allowing them to create a surplus of rice, as well as their long distance trade is salt and gold."

Consider:

The growth and strength of the 3 kingdoms of Mali, Ghana, and Songhai can be attributed to their fertile and easily farmable environment'''. This allowed them to create a surplus of rice, as well as their long distance trade of''' salt and gold.

I would agree with the idea of adding a new section of East Africa. You may consider putting the Coastal East Africa as a sub section in the East Africa section if you want to keep it in the article.

Overall:

-The viewpoint of the article is neutral and not persuasive. Good job!

-Consider adding information from more sources to improve on credibility.

-Good additions to the article, they flow well and improve upon the already existing article.