User:Candychill/Religion and LGBT people/Idabelda Peer Review

Brief Overview
Candychill has worked extensively on her Wiki article. She has made a list of substantial sources to be added and has drafted some of those additions as well. She has also made some edits to the existing page. The page is very well organized and thorough, but definitely has room for a lot of improvements.

Sandbox
The sandbox shows some effort and an outline of the work Candychill plans to bring to their Wiki page. The most thorough area is the information under Christianity, and there are some other sections with very brief bullet points. I am assuming Candychill plans to flesh those out more. For beginning stages, it looks great.

One suggestion I had while reviewing the page: I think there could be more clarification and organization around the "Christianity" section of the article. Christianity is such a huge umbrella terms for so many sects of religion and I'm sure they all have nuanced opinions about LGBT people. I like how Candychill is going into more detail on the Jehovah's Witness sect, and I believe other sects could use that same attention as well.

Contributions
under the contributions page, there is a long list of entries from Candychill dating consistently over the past few months, making it apparent that they have been working regularly on their article.

General info

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Evaluate the drafted changes
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