User:Canesandpeace/Christian Goldbach/Tbeaisasn579779257 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Canesandpeace


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Canesandpeace/Christian_Goldbach?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Christian Goldbach

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far the article is good you expanded the article a lot from the original article. That being said I think there are a few areas to be improved. First, an info box should be added. Now I know their aren't really many images in Wikimedia right now although I think by using some of the pictures to point out something like the relationship between Goldbach and Euler. Second off, the headings names should also be improved for example instead of having "early studies," maybe have "early life." Third, I think a few sentence should be changed like "In 1728, when Peter II became Tsar of Russia, Goldbach became Peter II and Peter II's cousin Anna's tutor, moving with the Russian court from St. Petersburg to Moscow." Its pretty confusing as it doesn't really say when Goldbach became their tutors was it before/after? So, im not 100% sure about the facts but I think this would sound better "In 1728, Goldbach became Peter II and his cousin Anna's Tutor after Peter II became Tsar. Along this change Goldbach moved with the Russian court from St. Petersburg to Moscow." Finally organization should be improved. The separating between biography and profession life is confusing so I think merging them should be considered. Also it would be wise to have a born and died heading as its a major event that should be focused although information may be scarce. The main big suggestions is to add a summary of his life in the top alongside the info box as some won't have enough time to look at the main page. On sources and tone, overall good job the tone is neutral, and the sources are mostly strong (however be careful with the Wikipedia and encyclopedia citation I recommend trying to find another source as they are often times vague or just wrong but if you can't that's ok).