User:Canesandpeace/Russian Academy of Sciences/DancingDoggo14 Peer Review

I think all in all, the page has loads of good quality content.


 * First, it's not very pretty to look at... maybe you can insert headers with the lined dividers, images, grids of when/which legislation was passed that affected the school, etc. (just ideas)
 * I also think there are some superfluous words that mess up the flow, for example, "as such" "some Western Reforms", I think you could get rid of the some and the as such. If you read it it aloud it would make sense. I don't mean to come off rude it just reads really well until you get to these few hiccups in wording.
 * From a content standpoint, information looks good. I don't know if you have more information pending but I have some ideas if you are stuck. Maybe there are like "notable alumni" or certain Boyar families that attended the academy. Also, what demographic attended for the most part. Or, how Peter's European tour influenced the creation of the academy-- you bring this up briefly in the intro.
 * I also think you can break up some of the sections and utilize the headers/dividers to give a more complete feel.
 * I'm not great with grammar but I always think it's good to go back and double check with a little book, or, put your work into grammarly.
 * What is Fauna & Flora??
 * Citations look good but it's never a bad idea to double check (using Rampolla writing in history or Purdue OWL)
 * There are little errors: missing a period .  after ST in the 2nd paragraph.
 * Last sentence on the second paragraph sounds weird.
 * The writing is smooth and it reads well but I think it can be concise.
 * A lot of: did, but, however, etc.

Overall, looks good for the most part. My biggest critique would be that it's just not that ascetically pleasing.