User:Cannon Hanson/Cultural burning/Savrit Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cannon Hanson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cannon Hanson/Cultural burning - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I am a little confused on your article. There is a brief introduction to the topic but then it goes straight into direct quotes and bullet points. I think the article would be better received if it was written in paragraph format as opposed to by each source. This would allow you to combine the sources and portray it more as an article or story rather than a list of points. It is more engaging for the reader and provides a path to understanding the topic. There is a lot of great and interesting content but most of it is either quotes or bullets from those quotes. Also, if you go back and look through some of your modules, it shows you how to add in citations, so you don't have to explicitly say 'source 1' and it will format it Wiki style. Another quick note, make sure to reread your article as I found a few grammatical errors.