User:CantrellL/Nim Li Punit/CassieSmith5 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CantrellL


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * I looked at the original Nim Li Punit article, because there wasn't anything in the sandbox. Let me know if there is any writing I should look at in addition to the original article.

Lead
The lead is very repetitive. There is also a lot of unnecessary information, like the coordinates. I think you could consolidate it into one paragraph and still have room to add a couple sentences of information. In particular, the lead could benefit from having more information that better reflects the contents of the article, like architecture, population estimates and excavations.

Also the first "paragraph" of the lead is only two sentences. Yuck. I think you could condense this and make it more clear.

Overall Impressions
This article could use a lot of attention. There are plenty of grammar mistakes, the writing is sloppy and the layout is not very interesting. There are also a lot of opportunities to add citations, particularly in the architecture, population and excavation sections.

Possible Directions to go in
There is a sentence in the ecology section that says "most of the surrounding broadleaf tropical rainforest is secondary growth, due to the disturbance of the Maya themselves." I think this topic of the Maya's impact on the land surface around them would be super interesting!The architecture section is missing a couple citations about the ballcourt and the orientation of the Plaza. I also think it would be cool to add an image of the ballcourt.

You could possibly add a section on the writing system at Nim Li Punit, as writing is mentioned in the excavation and population section.

The population and excavation sections could also use a couple references.

I don't know if there is any literature on these topics, but other possible sections that would benefit the overall article are: trade, oral tradition about the region, collapse, cultural significance to modern Indigenous Peoples and the nation of Belize, etc.