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Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title Pierre Rode
 * Article Evaluation:
 * Article Evaluation:

First off as I'm going through the article I notice some of the statements that are written aren't back by any sources, and after doing some short searches to see if any more information about him was available and in fact on the Oxford Music site they had a source for him that is overflowing with lots of personal life information and performances he has done throughout the years the could very easily be added to the article. The article also lists stuff like "Some sources say" but does not exactly link to what sources where they got that information from so I would need to find credible sources that can attest to that information. The lead to the article is also very lacking with just the one sentence of information just listing his name and birth and death date and what he was known for in very vague way. I feel like that section could very much be expanded upon after looking at other articles that are more developed and expanding on a better summary of who he is known for right off the bat and what he is known for such as what musical era he was a composer and violinist during. Underneath Pierre Rode's image his birthdate and death date and a jump to his works would make it look more professional and built of an article as well. Another thing that could be added to improve the article is links to any recordings of Rode's pieces as of 2020 because of Covid a school out in San Francisco put together a project of recordings of Rode's 24 Capricci for violin, op. 22 which would be a nice addition to the article and informative.


 * Sources:
 * Oxford Reference
 * Oxford Music Online

https://iicsanfrancisco.esteri.it/iic_sanfrancisco/en/gli_eventi/calendario/2020/05/progetto-pierre-rode-suono-italiano.html

https://www.naxos.com/person/Pierre_Rode/75762.htm
 * https://adp.library.ucsb.edu/index.php/matrix/detail/800004772/B-30611-Etude_Caprice
 * https://www.muziekweb.nl/en/Link/M00000247482/CLASSICAL/COMPOSER/Pierre-Rode
 * https://publishing.naxos.com/pages/pierre-rode-biography

Option 2
Right away at the beginning of the article it states at the top that the article does in fact have multiple issues right off the bat such as verification issues and that it is unverified because it lacks inline citations that are sufficient enough which would not be too hard to find more sources that are not listed to verify information and expand upon it. Another thing that could be changed is his page besides having the lead they just have a section titled "Biography" and list everything off about him in that part when I feel there is a good chunk of information available to space it out and make it a big more organized having specific sections for his family and life as well as his different performances and career.
 * Article title Carl Reinecke
 * Article Evaluation
 * Article Evaluation
 * Sources
 * Oxford Music Online
 * Proquest Music Periodicals Database
 * Proquest Music Periodicals Database

Option 3
This article so far is very well put together but while reading through and looking at the talk page there was a lot of debates in the past for how information should be posted in the page so I would definitely go back and see what changes have been made since then and try to keep it on track for what will work best for this type of wiki article. Another thing I noticed is some lines that say Edvard Grieg specifically said something such as what was his last words before he died that line is missing a citation to a specific reference to prove that is something he in fact said so trying to cross examine sources to find ones that can provide the credibility needed will be a good fix to the article. Another issue that the article has is it specifically states having issues with its use of external links and how they may not follow the guidelines so I know I will have to go in and see which ones do in fact contribute to the article and give more information and which ones are redundant and may not be suitable for use on Wikipedia. One last thing I noticed is some of the references used are quite big articles or are longer papers such as the source of "The Life and Works of Edvard Grieg" which is a 53 page article and that means there could be more evidence and information about Edvard Grieg that has been left out of the articles so I think it would be good to cross reference what has already been used to see if more could be used from them.
 * Article title Edvard Grieg
 * Article Evaluation
 * Article Evaluation
 * Sources
 * Oxford Music Online
 * https://www.muziekweb.nl/en/Link/M00000237595/CLASSICAL/COMPOSER/Edvard-Grieg
 * The Enjoyment of Music Thirteenth Edition W. W. Norton & Company
 * https://adp.library.ucsb.edu/index.php/mastertalent/detail/102344/Grieg_Edvard
 * https://adp.library.ucsb.edu/index.php/mastertalent/detail/102344/Grieg_Edvard



Topic Choices
-Pierre Rode: First off as I'm going through the article I notice some of the statements that are written aren't back by any sources, and after doing some short searches to see if any more information about him was available and in fact on the Oxford Music site they had a source for him that is overflowing with lots of personal life information and performances he has done throughout the years the could very easily be added to the article. The article also lists stuff like "Some sources say" but does not exactly link to what sources where they got that information from so I would need to find credible sources that can attest to that information. The lead to the article is also very lacking with just the one sentence of information just listing his name and birth and death date and what he was known for in very vague way. I feel like that section could very much be expanded upon after looking at other articles that are more developed and expanding on a better summary of who he is known for right off the bat and what he is known for such as what musical era he was a composer and violinist during. Underneath Pierre Rode's image his birthdate and death date and a jump to his works would make it look more professional and built of an article as well.

Article Evaluation
Notes: The Article is very short and has no citation numbers after information that must of been sourced from somewhere that is a concern and could be fixed.

Reads a lot like an essay instead of an article.

"Some further information on Walther can be found in the book Musica Poetica by Dietrich Bartel. On page 22, Bartel quotes Walther's definition of musica poetica, or musical rhetoric, as" This line just does not seem like a proper way to introduce information in an article it just seems like it is building up evidence in an english essay

"Some free keyboard music also belongs to his legacy." This does not entirely make sense do they mean music that is free use that you do not have to pay for or something else?

Upon further reading they share a link to https://imslp.org/wiki/Category:Walther,_Johann_Gottfried as their only external link which is a collection of free scores published by the International Music Score Library Project but it could of been cited and referenced better in the context of the article.

The article has a Media section but nothing is in it but the wiki commons has more photos relevant to Johann Gottfried Walther that could be added.

There is not much talks about his family except for he is cousins with Johann Sebastian Bach but there is no citation for that information but the wiki commons page lists that Johann Gottfried Walther had a son I wonder if there is more information about his family that is now more available and could be added to the article to give more background on him because the article now says nothing about him having a son.

No sources referenced from the past 5 years newest source listed is from 2001.


 * Name of article: Johann Gottfried Walther
 * Briefly describe why you have chosen this article to evaluate. I have chosen this article to evaluate because it definitely is one that could be improved on from first glance and Johann Gottfried Walther does not seem to be a composer really talked about much so I would like to find out more about him during this process. With this article I also want to reflect on and see what parts of it are done properly so far and what parts can be fixed or added on so I can learn right away what I should be looking for and doing when I do my article. I know right now I am looking at an article that is more properly written and comparing it to the article about Walther to get an idea for how it can be improved.

Lead

Guiding questions


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation: With my evaluation of the lead for this article it does have a concise introductory sentence listing off when Johann Gottfried Walther was born, his nationality as well as the many different things he was, besides being a composer of the Baroque era which is a nice introduction into the topic. It sets it up showing the different info about him that will be hopefully presented. The Lead does list off information that could potentially be used in different major sections of the article unfortunately it is not sectioned off to highlight anything major it just seems to be thrown together and a big chunk of the article is just a 4 line quote copy and pasted word for word from a book. They discuss in the lead that Walther was a composer but they do not go into detail at all listing what specific things he has composed they only list broad information such as how he became famous for his organ transcripts but never list a single transcript name which could be greatly improved upon considering the article gives audio examples of the pieces but none of their names are listed at all.

Content

Guiding questions


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Content evaluation: The content is relevant to the topic for the most part considering not much is listed in order for it to go off topic they do mention a bit of Bach's work but that was because Walther's stuff set up the "models" for Bach's transcripts. The latest information added is a recording mentioned from 2015 and it claims that as of 2020 it is the first and only complete recording but there is no citation to back it up so I am going to say for the most part the information may be dated especially since the only three sources referenced are from 1987, 1997 and 2001. Citations are missing as well as a lack of media which of course may not have been accessible last time the article was in fact updated but there is some now that could be added, there is also no real biography about Walther I understand with a lack of reliable resources it gets hard to list that stuff but as time goes on more information usually becomes more available and I feel like that could easily be added now. The article does not deal with any equity gaps.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions


 * Is the article neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the article attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation: The article does present in a very neutral tone and nothing is really sticking out as being in favor or against a particular position, they do state that "The single most important source for the work was the writings of Johann Mattheson, who is referenced more than 200 times" which with out citing a specific quote seems like a biased statement even if the vast amount of times Mattheson was referenced can be deemed an important source but without a specific quote claiming that it does seem biased. There does not seem to be any viewpoints that are overrepresented or under and it does not try to persuade any one.

Sources and References

Guiding questions


 * Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation: None of the information provided has specific citations but they do list three references but there is no links to any sort of site that is used as a reference two of them seem to be from books or paper media and the third one is in German so I am not so sure what the reference is used for. The sources list a small handful of pages on the topic but the sources are also pretty old as I have previously stated they are from 1987, 1997 and 2001 which is more then almost 10 years time for all the sources. The few links that are posted do work.

Organization

Guiding questions


 * Is the article well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the article have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation: The article is well written some of the information feels like it could be swapped around in places to make it flow a bit better I feel like talking about his teaching should go in a sort of biography instead of at the end while his different works and what he contributed to music should have its own specific section but besides that there is not really any sections just all the information put in a couple paragraphs.

Images and Media

Guiding questions


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation: The only image that is on the actual page is just a photo of Johann Gottfried Walther and it is one that is available in the wiki commons so it is adhering to Wikipedia's copyright regulations, and the image is just captioned with his name I know Wikicommons now has a few more photos that relate to his Lexicon and could enhance the page.

Checking the talk page

Guiding questions


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

Talk page evaluation: There is no conversations going on at all on the talk page the last question that was asked in relation to the media on the page was back in 2006 and the comment was unsigned and it does not look like any one answered it unfortunately. The article is apart of 3 different WikiProjects which are WikiProject Biography, WikiProject Composers and WikiProject Music Theory and they are all rated as Start-class and Walther is not one I believe to have read a lot about in my book so it is a lot of new information about him.

Overall impressions

Guiding questions


 * What is the article's overall status?
 * What are the article's strengths?
 * How can the article be improved?
 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed?

Overall evaluation: The overall status is completely a Star-class page, and its strengths lie in its effort to list a handful of information that most likely was available at the time it was first written and give information about many of the things they list. The article can be improved by hopefully finding more sources to add more information about Walther because after checking on the Oxford Music Online database there is a lot more information listed about Walther then what is put in the article such as his family life and more of his education and work. I feel like the article is underdeveloped but it does have a lot of potential to be much better just with a little bit of research I have done there is potential for it to be built upon a lot more.

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