User:Capricon13/Rosa Guerra/Tjade21 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Capricon13
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Capricon13/Rosa Guerra
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rosa Guerra
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rosa Guerra

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section

The lead has been updated and done very well. The original lead had little to no information and she did very well on giving the perfect amount of context and setting up the wiki page. She added more context on who this woman was personality instead of just what she did, like what she stood for and her importance in advocating woman's rights which added to the overall meaning. The lead section is also done in such a way that doesn't use too much information and sums up the most important parts very well. The lead section is perfect to me.

One part of the lead that cause sight confusion was the "Guerra defended the idea that women should not be confined to household duties, but were born to be educated" Yet, her novel mentioned more of "a model of a Christian, submissive and faithful woman". This is a little confusing as a submissive woman give more of an opposite feel to a "should not be confided to household duties" maybe better wording could make this statement stronger stating "should not be confided to ones own thoughts and were born to become educated".

Content

Overall content is relevant, if a source is available as a reader I would like to know more about why she signed Cecilia instead of a more masculine name since woman were discouraged to write and publish works. Context is done well I think a good amount of information was given on who she was overall and the writings she published which were her life's work.

Maybe more of the impact her writings had on the minds of the woman who could read them. Her newspaper was subscription based so it sounds like a decent amount read them, what was the impact of this? Did she truly inspire other woman and their children to get educated?

"There was a renowned fear of white Argentina women being held captive by indigenous people. Rosa Guerra initially wrote the novel for a newly married couple." the second part for this sentence seems out of place, maybe move the part about the married couple to the beginning for the section instead of right after this part of information. Though giving more historical context of this time during her publication is great and adds a lot to the article

Tone and Balance

The context is neutral and no opinions or arguments shine through. No biases that I can see.

Sources

The sources are secondary and reliable after clicking on some of the links and each sentence of new information was backed by a source.

All sources seem to be current and have no problem accessing

Organization

Organization looks great I think she sets up the article well and is straightforward. Ideas and examples are expressed in a cohesive manner. Sentences are short and sum up the meaning of the article well. No drawn out sentences or huge ideas that need a lot of historical context without ever giving the actual idea. Main points shine out brightly

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